Tongue and Bee

I decided to live dangerously in October. It’s a scary month, so I’m going to explore a form of poetry with stringent rules that moves at a rapid-fire pace. I’m going to write blitz poetry. This unusual style, developed by Robert Keim, has set rules using connecting phrases to create a 50-line verse I titled Tongue and Bee.

Line 1 is a short phrase or image. Line 2 is another short phrase or image using the same first word as line 1. Lines 3 and 4 starts with the same word used as the last word of line 2. Then, lines 5 and 6 use the last word of line 4. This pattern is followed until line 48. Line 49 uses the last word in 48. Line 50 begins with the last word in line 47. The title is three words long. The title format is the first word of line 3, a preposition or conjunction, and the first word of 47. You can’t use any punctuation. Luckily, these poems don’t need to rhyme. This poetic adventure will either be a lot of fun or leave me frustrated. I will call my first Blitz poem Tongue and Bee. Let’s get our spooky scare on right now.

Tongue and Bee

Bee invaded my mouth

Bee stung my tongue

Tongue experiences pain

Tongue insulted by offense

Offense mingled with food

Offense mixed with hunger

Hunger left unsatisfied

Hunger so misunderstood

Misunderstood by the younger

Misunderstood by the family

Family sitting at the table

Family my only defense

Defense against the bees

Defense with swatting hands

Hands making bees flee

Hands that remain

Remain to clean the table

Remain to share my pain

Pain in mouth

Pain in heart

Heart that took offense

Heart that loves deep

Deep desire

Deep need

Need for forgotten meal

Need for company

Company to laugh

Company to share the story

Story about damaged tongue

Story about bee stings

Stings in the early fall

Stings because the flowers died

Died because of winter

Died because of cold

Cold weather change

Cold wandering heart

Heart of summer

Heart and soul

Soul of travelers

Souls of those moving

Moving beyond grace

Moving beyond bee sting

Sting in the mouth

Sting of venom

Venom of anger

Venom mixed with salad

Salad mixed with bee

Salad chewed small



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12 thoughts on “Tongue and Bee

  1. That is one hell of an adventure! I was excited myself to see what you were going to take up and ace this month. This is fantastic and clearly, not so easy to write! 😅 Well done on this one! Hope you can keep going with this challenge without much struggles. 💕

  2. Wow! That’s a powerful poem!!! I love seeing how limits/edges/guidelines/forms can be a boon to creativity… And I continue to admire how diligently you pour your eloquence and honesty and vision into SO MANY different forms of poetry (and some prose, too). I am particularly struck in this poem by these lines: “Hunger left unsatisfied/Hunger so misunderstood/Misunderstood by the younger/Misunderstood by the family.” Thank you for continuing to be a creative inspiration!

  3. To say the least, the poem moves along. I think the form could work for comedy as it does here for tragedy. This could be performed with choreography.

    I don’t know if you were ever stung this way. I was, thank goodness long ago.

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